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Hi, Stella! That's a thoughtful view. Parents should support their children while giving them space to grow and learn on their own. But of course, this isn't as easy as it sounds. There are many struggles parents encounter in taking care of their children. ^^ Fighting! 
~T. Jewel
I think the most important role of a parent is waiting for everything behind him one step. 
>>I think my most important role as a parent is to stay one step behind my son.
So, he can do everything.
>>CORRECT
OR
>>So he can do everything on his own.
He can find diverse solutions for them by himself when he go through many falures.
>>He can find diverse solutions for himself when he goes through many failures.
Also he can trys to do many things what he wants. 
>>Also, he can try to do many things he wants to.
At that time ,looking at him,silently as parent. 
>>At that time, looking at him silently as a parent.
OR
>>At this time, I am looking at him silently as a parent, reflecting on his growth.
Giving him many chance to do somthing,I think the most important rol of a parent. 
>>Giving him many chances to do something, I think, is the most important role of a parent.
But I don't do this ways, now. 
>>But I don't do things this way now.
It's too hard to watch him for me without shouting. 
>>It's too hard for me to just watch him without shouting.
So, I usually couldn't sleep well at every night, because It makes me pailful.
>>So, I usually have trouble sleeping at night because it causes me pain.
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