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All North Korean soldiers are victim who are dispatched of troops forcibly to this war by tricks of government.

Some of them want to asylum in South Korea, we should receive them even though the process is complicated.

Why do they should diel the Russia-Ukraine war ? They don't know the reasons.

Persons like Putin who occur war are inhuman and brutal.

They are the enemy of humanity.

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Ms. Lily
As always, you were able to express your thoughts well again. This also was my question, why do some leaders put the lives of their citizens in danger? 
Thank you for this answer. See you later!
Aki~

All North Korean soldiers are victim who are dispatched of troops forcibly to this war by tricks of government.
>>>  All North Korean soldiers are victims who were dispatched of troops forcibly to this war by tricks of the government.

Some of them want to asylum in South Korea, we should receive them even though the process is complicated.
>>> Some of them want asylum in South Korea, we should receive them even though the process is complicated.

Why do they should diel the Russia-Ukraine war? They don't know the reasons.
>>> CORRECT!

Persons like Putin who occur war are inhuman and brutal.
>>> Individuals like Putin, who engage in war, are inhuman and brutal

They are the enemy of humanity.
>>> CORRECT!
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