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What form of exercise is the most exciting for you?

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2025-02-22 39

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I like kind of anaerobic exercise.
when I lift up heavy dumbels, I can feel my muscle pain.
This pain will reach not right after but within 24 hours.
That feeling makes me exercise everyday despite being tired.
And do not forget to take high nutritions after gym.
This is because having a good food after exercise is a perfect exercise.

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Hi Seung Min!
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I like kind of anaerobic exercise.
>> I like this kind of anaerobic exercise.
when I lift up heavy dumbels, I can feel my muscle pain.
>> When I lift heavy dumbbells, I can feel my muscles ache.
This pain will reach not right after but within 24 hours.
>> This pain does not appear immediately but usually within 24 hours.
That feeling makes me exercise everyday despite being tired.
>> That feeling makes me exercise every day despite being tired.
And do not forget to take high nutritions after gym.
>> I also do not forget to consume nutritious food after going to the gym.
This is because having a good food after exercise is a perfect exercise.
>> This is because eating well after exercise is an important part of a good workout.






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