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How much transparency should the media cover when reporting or dealing with controversial and sensit

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Based on the idea that the public has the right to know, media tend to report information in full transparency. I believe that it is readers’ responsibility to be opinionated, so media coverage must not be biased and has all available information. However, this full disclosure has side effects of retaliation or secondary victimization. Therefore, there needs to be efforts to deal with controversial and sensitive cases. For example, informants to be thoroughly protected and reporters should fully verify the information. Many news agencies include this click to open rate in the reporters’ performance assessment which lead many journalists to come up with sensational reports. However, if this report comes with lack of verification, it can stir up cancel culture and discrimination. News agencies correct the false information afterward which the public pay little attention to. Accordingly, I believe the media should release information that it can fully verified and guarantee anonymity.

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Thank you for this Aciel! Good luck on your work this weekend. 

Based on the idea that the public has the right to know, media tend to report information in full transparency. 
>>>  correct 
I believe that it is readers’ responsibility to be opinionated, so media coverage must not be biased and has all available information. 
>>> OR: I believe that it is the readers’ discretion to lean towards a certain opinion, so media coverage must not be biased and has all available information.   
However, this full disclosure has side effects of retaliation or secondary victimization. 
>>>  correct  
Therefore, there needs to be efforts to deal with controversial and sensitive cases. 
>>>  correct  
For example, informants to be thoroughly protected and reporters should fully verify the information. 
>>>  OR:  For example, informants must be thoroughly protected and reporters should fully verify the information. 
Many news agencies include this click to open rate in the reporters’ performance assessment which lead many journalists to come up with sensational reports. 
>>>  OR: Many news agencies include this click to open rate in the reporters’ performance assessment which lead to many journalists coming up with sensational reports. 
>>> OR: Many news agencies include this click to open rate in the reporters’ performance assessment which cause/push many journalists to come up with sensational reports.
However, if this report comes with lack of verification, it can stir up cancel culture and discrimination. 
>>>  correct   
News agencies correct the false information afterward which the public pay little attention to. 
>>>  correct   
Accordingly, I believe the media should release information that it can fully verified and guarantee anonymity.
>>> Accordingly, I believe the media should release information that can be fully verified and guarantee anonymity.  
>>> OR:  Accordingly, I believe the media should release information that is fully verified and guarantee anonymity.  
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