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What food can you cook really well ?

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2025-02-21 317

회원님의 영작문

In Korea, like other countries, women have been responsible for cooking for a long time.
But everyting changes.
These days in Korea, more and more men also are gradually cooking at home. but paradoxically more nad more women gradually prefer to order food instead of cooking at home.
Talking about my family, I prefer to cook at home but my two daughters want to go out for meals and order food.
I respect these changes and trends, so I often eat out with my children.
As for my cooking, like most koreans, I really love korean Ramen, a fast food. it is very easy to cook and very delicious, so I very often cook and eat Ramen for lunch.
However, Ramen is not a real dish. Kimchi stew is a real dish and my favorite food and I can cook it really well.
Recently, I enjoy cooking while watching cooking channels on YouTube. there are so many cooking channels on YouTube and I just follow the recipes shown on cooking channels.
I would really love to cook kimchi stew for you someday.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Soong Hoon^^
Thank you for sharing.
Honestly, I've already tried kimchi stew and unfortunately I'm not a big fan. 
_T. SHAY^^
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In Korea, like other countries, women have been responsible for cooking for a long time.
>>Correct
OR: Just like other countries, it is common for women to do the cooking in Korea.
OR: Just like other countries, women are in charge of cooking in Korea.
But everyting changes.
>>But everything changes.
OR: But a lot has changed already.
These days in Korea, more and more men also are gradually cooking at home. 
>>Correct
OR: These days in Korea, the number of men cooking for the family is increasing.
but paradoxically more nad more women gradually prefer to order food instead of cooking at home.
>>But paradoxically more and more women gradually prefer to order food instead of cooking at home.
OR: Surprisingly, more and more women also lose interest in cooking at home. In fact, they prefer ordering food online.
Talking about my family, I prefer to cook at home, but my two daughters want to go out for meals and order food.
>>Correct
OR: Speaking of family, I prefer to have homemade meals, so I cook food, but my two daughter prefer ordering food and eating out.
I respect these changes and trends, so I often eat out with my children.
>>Correct
OR: I acknowledge that these are part of the changes in our society, so I often eat out with my children.
As for my cooking, like most koreans, I really love korean Ramen, a fast food.
>>As for my cooking, like most Koreans, I really love Korean Ramen - a fast food.
OR: In terms of cooking, like most Koreans, I really love ramen - an instant food.
it is very easy to cook and very delicious, so I very often cook and eat Ramen for lunch.
>>It is very easy to cook and very delicious, so I often cook and eat Ramen for lunch.
OR: It is delicious and easy to prepare, so I often have it for lunch.
However, Ramen is not a real dish. 
>>Correct
OR: However, ramen is not a healthy dish.
Kimchi stew is a real dish and my favorite food and I can cook it really well.
>>Kimchi stew is a real dish and my favorite food, and I can cook it really well.
OR: Kimchi stew is a healthy dish, not to mention my favorite, and I can cook it really well.
Recently, I enjoy cooking while watching cooking channels on YouTube. 
>>Correct
OR: Lately, I started cooking while watching cooking channels on YouTube.
there are so many cooking channels on YouTube and I just follow the recipes shown on cooking channels.
>>There are so many cooking channels on YouTube and I just follow the recipes shown on the cooking channels.
I would really love to cook kimchi stew for you someday.
>>Correct
OR: I would really love serve you my own version of kimchi stew someday.

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