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Is getting a divorce a wise decision?

작성자: 손*희
2025-02-20 277

회원님의 영작문

I think getting a divorce is a wise decision.
Firstly, personal well-being is paramount. A marriage that is fraught with constant arguments, lack of communication, or emotional neglect can take a significant toll on an individual's mental and emotional health. Staying in such an environment can lead to feelings of depression, anxiety, and low self-esteem. By choosing to divorce, individuals can prioritize their mental health and seek a more positive and supportive environment, ultimately leading to personal growth and happiness.
Secondly, staying in an unhealthy marriage can also have negative effects on children, if present. Children are highly perceptive and can sense tension and conflict between their parents. A toxic environment can impact their emotional development and lead to long-term psychological issues. By choosing to divorce, parents can create a healthier atmosphere for their children, demonstrating the importance of self-respect and the value of healthy relationships.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Hana! Thank you for your wonderful insight on this topic. At your age, you are very aware of such social issues. MArriage is a complicated matter and should not be taken lightly. I am into freedom of choice, but we should also take accountability for our decisions. Let's talk again soon. See you!
--Teacher Anji



I think getting a divorce is a wise decision.
>> CORRECT
Firstly, personal well-being is paramount.
>> CORRECT
 A marriage that is fraught with constant arguments, lack of communication, or emotional neglect can take a significant toll on an individual's mental and emotional health. 
>> CORRECT
Staying in such an environment can lead to feelings of depression, anxiety, and low self-esteem. 
>> CORRECT
By choosing to divorce, individuals can prioritize their mental health and seek a more positive and supportive environment, ultimately leading to personal growth and happiness.
>> CORRECT
Secondly, staying in an unhealthy marriage can also have negative effects on children, if present. 
>> Secondly, staying in an unhealthy marriage can also have negative effects on children, if any.
Children are highly perceptive and can sense tension and conflict between their parents. 
>> CORRECT
A toxic environment can impact their emotional development and lead to long-term psychological issues. 
>> CORRECT
By choosing to divorce, parents can create a healthier atmosphere for their children, demonstrating the importance of self-respect and the value of healthy relationships.
>> CORRECT
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