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If you had a different major in university, what could it be? Why?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-02-19 144

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Well, if I had another major in university, I would have chosen to major in nursing.
Actually, the field I was really interested in was health.
I have dreamed of becoming a doctor or nurse since I was young. It looked cool to save people and take care of injured people. They looked like heroes in Marvel movies.
But I had to study hard and get a high score to choose the major.
Also, it was an important job that could save and kill people, so I hard to have a pretty heavy responsibility and a professional consciousness, but I was not confident of dealing with that heavy responsibility and a professional consciousness, so I chose another major.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Yun, 

Thank you once again for submitting your answer. 
First of all, you did great in expressing yourself through writing. ^^
I was surprised by the major that you had chosen, but I was amazed to know the reason behind it. 
I think the major you took was also a great one. It was not easy, as you really need to have a passion for machines and programs. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



Well, if I had another major in university, I would have chosen to major in nursing.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I would have majored in nursing if I could have selected a second major.

Actually, the field I was really interested in was health.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Health was the field that truly captured my interest.

I have dreamed of becoming a doctor or nurse since I was young. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: From a young age, I aspired to be a doctor or nurse.

It looked cool to save people and take care of injured people. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Helping and taking care of injured people appeared fascinating.

They looked like heroes in Marvel movies.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: They seemed like superheroes straight out of Marvel movies.

But I had to study hard and get a high score to choose the major.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: However, I needed to work hard and achieve high grades to pursue that major.

Also, it was an important job that could save and kill people, so I hard to have a pretty heavy responsibility and a professional consciousness, but I was not confident of dealing with that heavy responsibility and a professional consciousness, so I chose another major.
>> It was also an important job that involved the potential to save or harm lives, requiring a strong sense of responsibility and professional awareness. However, I wasn't confident in my ability to handle such a heavy responsibility, so I decided to pursue a different major.
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