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"Everyone prefers to look younger. And I think someone who manages their appearance well has a positive mindset. But being overly concerned with one's appearance is a sign of low self-esteem.

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Thanks for doing your essay Ms. Rachel! Well done! Your knowledge of the dispute and the events surrounding it shows in your essay. It is clear that you understand the main points of contention, and you have discussed these in an easily understood way. Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
>>>Everyone prefers to look younger.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 And I think someone who manages their appearance well has a positive mindset. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But being overly concerned with one's appearance is a sign of low self-esteem.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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