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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation¡¯s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings?

Maintaining old buildings may not be important constructively. However, maintaining traditional buildings can help maintain the country's traditional culture.
Taking Korea as an example, hanok, a traditional Korean house, can itself be an important resource that shows traditional style of architectural art. It is important because we can see that Korean houses were built instead of using Chinese and Japanese houses as they were. Therefore, I think it is desirable to maintain these styles of houses.

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Hi there Lee! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework! You are making steady progress, and it's exciting to see you grow. You showed a good understanding of the concept, but I would like to see more development in your reasoning.  Keep up the great effort! Till next time!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Maintaining old buildings may not be important constructively. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, maintaining traditional buildings can help maintain the country's traditional culture.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Taking Korea as an example, Hanok, a traditional Korean house, can itself be an important resource that shows traditional style of architectural art. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It is important because we can see that Korean houses were built instead of using Chinese and Japanese houses as they were.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Therefore, I think it is desirable to maintain these styles of houses.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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