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Q : How do Koreans celebrate birthdays?

A : Most Koreans give a birthday present. Nowadays, many people give a gifticon instead of real gift because it is convenient to use. In my case, my family gather in the hometown and celebrate a birthday together.

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Hello Eddy,

Great job on your answer! You¡¯ve done a nice job explaining how birthdays are celebrated in Korea, and I love that you shared a bit about your own family tradition.

It¡¯s great that you mentioned how gifticons are becoming more common because they¡¯re so convenient. This is a good reflection of modern-day Korea, where technology plays a big role in daily life.

Your personal touch about how your family gathers in your hometown adds a warm and meaningful detail, showing that family is central to birthday celebrations.

One small suggestion to improve your answer would be to add a little more detail about the types of activities or food that might be involved in the celebration, since birthdays are often special in terms of food and customs in Korea. But overall, this is a lovely and clear answer!

Keep it up, you're doing great!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Most Koreans give a birthday present.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Most Koreans give birthday presents.

Nowadays, many people give a gifticon instead of real gift because it is convenient to use.

>>Nowadays, many people give a gifticon instead of a real gift because it is convenient to use.

In my case, my family gather in the hometown and celebrate a birthday together.

>>In my case, my family gathers in our hometown and celebrates birthdays together.

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