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In your opinion, what is the best age to be, and what makes that age special?

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In my opinion, late twenty's to early thirty's is the best age for life.
Early twenty's is too young to decied to their career.
So they could feel anxiety for their future.
However late twenty's is still young and they have a job.
That's why I beilieve that late twenty's is the best age.

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Hello! I'm so glad you made the effort to finish the homework. You did an outstanding job expressing your thoughts—keep up the excellent work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^

In my opinion, late twenty's to early thirty's is the best age for life.
>> In my opinion, the late twenties to early thirties is the best stage of life. 

Early twenty's is too young to decied to their career. 
So they could feel anxiety for their future.
>> The early twenties is too young to decide on a career, so people may feel anxious about their future. 

However late twenty's is still young and they have a job.
>> However, the late twenties is still a young age, and by then, most people have a job.

That's why I beilieve that late twenty's is the best age.

>> That¡¯s why I believe the late twenties is the best age.
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