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I do love football. I like not only watching football match but playing football. Actually, there are many reasons why I love playing football. I've played football since when I was in a elementary school until now. To be honest, I'm quite good at playing haha. But I wasn't that much good at playing at the first time. Most of my friends love football as well. I didn't play well like them. As time goes on, I just tried to play a lot with my friends, and my technique was getting better then before, then my friends told me like "You play really well now!". It made me feel happy. I joined the school football club with my friends, and we participated in football tournament representing our school. Even though we lost the final match, I just want to say I played football super competitive and enthusiastic during that tournament. I learned sportsmenship as well. I still play football but not as that much like before.

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Hi, Geon^^
I can tell that you really are into it.
That's a good memory. 
I hope you're still playing with your friends once in a while.
It seems like you worked hard to train to play football. 
You should be proud of yourself. ^^
_T. SHAY^^
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I do love football.
>>Correct
OR: I'm into football.

I like not only watching football match but playing football.
>>
I like not only watching football match but also playing football.
OR: I love both playing and watching a football match.
Actually, there are many reasons why I love playing football.
>>Correct
OR: I love playing for many reasons.
I've played football since when I was in a elementary school until now.
>>
I've played football since I was in a elementary school until now.
To be honest, I'm quite good at playing haha.
>>Correct
OR: To tell the truth, I'm quite good at playing.
But I wasn't that much good at playing at the first time.
>>But I wasn't that good at first.
Most of my friends love football as well.
>>Correct
OR: I also surrounded by friends who love football.
I didn't play well like them.
>>Correct
OR: I wasn't as good as them.
As time goes on, I just tried to play a lot with my friends, and my technique was getting better then before, then my friends told me like "You play really well now!".
>>
As time goes on, I just tried to play a lot with my friends, and my technique got better than before, then my friends told me, "You play really well now!".
It made me feel happy.
>>Correct
OR: I was happy to hear that.
I joined the school football club with my friends, and we participated in football tournament representing our school.
>>
I joined the school football club with my friends, and we participated in a football tournament representing our school.
Even though we lost the final match, I just want to say I played football super competitive and enthusiastic during that tournament.
>>
Even though we lost the final match, I just want to say I was really competitive and enthusiastic while playing during that tournament.
I learned sportsmenship as well.
>>
I learned sportsmanship as well.
 I still play football but not as that much like before.
>>Correct
OR: I still play football these days but not as often as I used to.
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