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Exercise in the gym or Outdoor exercise-Exercising in the gym is a much better choice.

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Exercising in the gym is a much better choice.
First, gyms are not affected by weather and environmental conditions. When exercising outdoors, weather can restrict workout opportunities. Rainy or excessively hot days can make it difficult to maintain a consistent exercise routine. However, in a gym, individuals can work out in a comfortable environment at any time, which is advantageous for sustaining a regular exercise habit.
Second, gyms can serve as a venue for social interaction. People who work out in a gym can encourage each other and have the opportunity to meet workout partners. This social interaction can motivate individuals to continue exercising and create a positive environment for sustained fitness. In contrast, outdoor exercise is often done alone, which may lack such interaction.

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Hi, Hana! Thank you for this wonderful thought. As long as we work out, the place shouldn't be an issue. It depends on our personality and need. Let us stay healthy. See you!
--Teacher Anji


Exercising in the gym is a much better choice.
>> CORRECT
First, gyms are not affected by weather and environmental conditions. 
>> CORRECT
When exercising outdoors, weather can restrict workout opportunities. 
>> CORRECT
Rainy or excessively hot days can make it difficult to maintain a consistent exercise routine. 
>> CORRECT
However, in a gym, individuals can work out in a comfortable environment at any time, which is advantageous for sustaining a regular exercise habit.
>> CORRECT
Second, gyms can serve as a venue for social interaction. 
>> CORRECT
People who work out in a gym can encourage each other and have the opportunity to meet workout partners. 
>> CORRECT
This social interaction can motivate individuals to continue exercising and create a positive environment for sustained fitness.
>> CORRECT
 In contrast, outdoor exercise is often done alone, which may lack such interaction.
>> CORRECT
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