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Talk about the most shocking historical fact that you\'ve learned, studied, or read.

작성자: 박*호
2025-02-11 268

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As we know, the United States has been the most powerful country in the world and a symbol of freedom and democracy.
The U.S. has also been leading the global economy and technological advancement. so many people in other countries admire America and want to live there.
But I was shocked to know that the current U.S. today was made through lots of wars of aggression against other countries.
The U.S. started as a small nation of several states on the eastern coast of North America when it gained independence from the united kingdom.
And then the U.S. took Florida state and other nearby areas from Spain through war
And then the U.S. purchased from Emperor Napoleon the central part of North America, which is now about one-third the size of the United States.
And then the U.S. took Texas and California and other nearby areas from Mexico through war.
I was surprised because the above facts were different from America's image of peace.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Sun Ho
You do know a lot about history.
I did study before, but I forgot most of it and I realized that I also didn't learn a lot about World History.
_T. SHAY^^
***
As we know, the United States has been the most powerful country in the world and a symbol of freedom and democracy.
>>As we know, the United States has been the most powerful country in the world, and it has been a symbol of freedom and democracy.
OR: It is widely known that the United States has been the most powerful country in the world. In addition, it has been a symbol of freedom and democracy.
The U.S. has also been leading the global economy and technological advancement.
>>Correct
OR: And not only that, the U.S. has also been leading the global economy and the technological advancements.
so many people in other countries admire America and want to live there.
>>So many people in other countries admire American and want to live there.
OR: Due to that, many people from all around the globe dream of living in America.
But I was shocked to know that the current U.S. today was made through lots of wars of aggression against other countries.
>>But I was shocked to know that the U.S. today was made through lots of wars against other countries.
The U.S. started as a small nation of several states on the eastern coast of North America when it gained independence from the united kingdom.
>>The U.S. started as a small nation of several states on the eastern coast of North America when it gained independence from the United Kingdom.
And then the U.S. took Florida state and other nearby areas from Spain through war
>>And then the U.S. took the state of Florida and other other nearby areas from Spain through war.
And then the U.S. purchased from Emperor Napoleon the central part of North America, which is now about one-third the size of the United States.
>>And then the U.S. bought the central part of North America from Emperor Napoleon, which is now about one-third the size of the United States.
And then the U.S. took Texas and California and other nearby areas from Mexico through war.
>>Correct
I was surprised because the above facts were different from America's image of peace.
>>Correct
OR: It's surprising because the American history and how it came to be doesn't really exemplify peace which is what the country is known for.
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