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Talk about an interesting culture that you learned or experienced in other countries.

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2025-02-07 137

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I have been to many other countries and experienced thier cultures.
I think that a country's culture reflects the lives and history of its people, so the culture of one country must be different from the culture of another country.
When I visit other countries, the best thing is to experience the culture of other countries different from that of my country.
Let me introduce you some example that I have experienced in person.
First, when I traveled to Europe such as France, Italy, and Spain in 2017, I was surprided that there was only a paid toilet in European countries and in addition, there were too few paid toilets, so it was hard to find them.
Unlike those countries, there are so many public free toilets in Korea that I can use whenever I want.
The next thing was when I went to Vietnam last year.
There were so many motocycles on the road and their noise was so loud that I had a hard time.
I heard from the locals that it was because of the lack of public transportation.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Sun Ho^^
Thank you for sharing. 
I didn't know that about the European countries.  
Well, public toilets in the Philippines are also not free. 
There are some that are free though.
_T. SHAY^^
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I have been to many other countries and experienced thier cultures.
>>I have been to many other countries and experienced their cultures.
I think that a country's culture reflects the lives and history of its people, so the culture of one country must be different from the culture of another country.
>>Correct
OR: I think a country's culture reflects the people's way of life which makes one culture different from another.
When I visit other countries, the best thing is to experience the culture of other countries different from that of my country.
>>Correct
OR: When I visit other countries, I'd like to experience the cultures that are different from the country where I came from.
Let me introduce you some example that I have experienced in person.
>>Correct
OR: Let me share some examples that I experienced myself.
First, when I traveled to Europe such as France, Italy, and Spain in 2017, I was surprided that there was only a paid toilet in European countries and in addition, there were too few paid toilets, so it was hard to find them.
>>First, when I traveled to different countries Europe such as France, Italy, and Spain in 2017, I was surprised that there were only paid toilets in European countries. And in addition, there were only a few paid toilets, so it was hard to find them.
Unlike those countries, there are so many public free toilets in Korea that I can use whenever I want.
>>Unlike those countries, there are so many free public toilets in Korea that I can use whenever I want.
The next thing was when I went to Vietnam last year.
>>The next thing is when I went to Vietnam last year. 
OR: The next thing happened when I went to Vietnam last year.
OR: The next thing I'd like to share happened during my trip to Vietnam last year.
There were so many motocycles on the road and their noise was so loud that I had a hard time.
>>There were so many motorcycles on the road and they made loud noises that I had a hard time.
I heard from the locals that it was because of the lack of public transportation.
>>I heard from the locals that it is because of the lack of public transportations.
OR: I heard from the locals that motorcycles are common because of the lack of public transportations.
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