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What is your ideal workplace?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-02-03 740

회원님의 영작문

In Korea, there is a funny saying, "less work and earn a lot of money."
Accordingly, it is considered an ideal workplace if three conditions are met.
First, a job with a high salary.
As many people think a job that can make a lot of money is a good job, I think it is an ideal job if you have a high salary. You can make extra money, but it's easy to work and a place with a lot of self-authority, right?
Second, workplaces with a good welfare environment for employees.
These days, a new word "work-life balance" is emerging in many Koreans. It is a compound word of work and balance, which means that they prefer a job where work and family and work and individual time. In addition, it would be nice if it was a work place that respects employees' work-life balance and cares for employees.
Thrid, a workplace with a free atmosphere.
A free atmosphere is not a workplace that doesn't matter if you are rude to people. I'm talking about a workplace where you can freely come up with ideas.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi! 

Wow! You gave me such nice answers. It would be so lovely to work in such a place. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


In Korea, there is a funny saying, "less work and earn a lot of money."
>> In Korea, there is a funny saying that goes, "Less work and earn a lot of money."

Accordingly, it is considered an ideal workplace if three conditions are met.
>> CORRECT.

First, a job with a high salary.
>> CORRECT.

As many people think a job that can make a lot of money is a good job, I think it is an ideal job if you have a high salary. 
>> CORRECT.

You can make extra money, but it's easy to work and a place with a lot of self-authority, right?
>> You can make extra money, have an easy workload, and a place with a lot of autonomy, right?

Second, workplaces with a good welfare environment for employees.
>> CORRECT.

These days, a new word "work-life balance" is emerging in many Koreans. 
>> These days, a new word,  "work-life balance" is emerging among many Koreans. 

It is a compound word of work and balance, which means that they prefer a job where work and family and work and individual time. 
>> It is a compound word of "work" and "balance," meaning that people prefer a job where work, family, and personal time are balanced.

In addition, it would be nice if it was a work place that respects employees' work-life balance and cares for employees.
>>  In addition, it would be nice if it were a workplace that respects employees' work-life balance and cares for them.

Thrid, a workplace with a free atmosphere.
>> Third, a workplace with a free atmosphere.

A free atmosphere is not a workplace that doesn't matter if you are rude to people. I'm talking about a workplace where you can freely come up with ideas.
>> CORRECT.
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