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Are banks the best place to keep your money in?

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The bank is the best place to keep my money. I don't know how to in best. Lately a lot of person invest stocks and virtual money. I can't that. Because I scare to inbest something. I want to safely keep my money. So I keep my money in the bank. The bank give me interest every year. I only want to that bank to keep well my money.

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Hi, Ms. Eva!
People are very mindful about their money. They invest to earn more, and they put money in banks because it is the safest place where you can put your money. Also, banks have a responsibility to guard our money because of the benefit from it. Thank you f or this!
Aki~

The bank is the best place to keep my money.
>>> CORRECT!

I don't know how to in best.
>>> I don't know how to invest.

Lately a lot of person invest stocks and virtual money. 
>>> Lately a lot of people invest in stocks and virtual money. 

I can't that. Because I scare to inbest something
>>> I can't do that because I am scared to invest in something.

 I want to safely keep my money.
>>> CORRECT!

So I keep my money in the bank.
>>> CORRECT!

The bank give me interest every year.
>>>  The bank gives me interest every year.

I only want to that bank to keep well my money.
>>> I only want that bank to keep my money well.


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