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What is your ideal boss?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-01-24 298

회원님의 영작문

Well, like a tall, handsome, rich man from the drama? HAHAHA, I'm just joking.
First, you should have a smile face.
There is a Korean saying that you can't spit on a smiling face. If you smile, it means, you can't easily hate it or get angry.
Rather than a person's blunt or angry expression, a smiling face will make the other person comfortable and will be easier to approach.
Second, you should be able to get along with everyone easily.
It is a factor that is related to the first factor, but if it is uncomfortable to approach, I think the atmosphere is also uncomfortable. Also, it's because you don't have a hard time finding help and you can learn your work well.
Thrid, you need to be good at your work and have problem-solving skills.
In order to solve the problem that occured without panicking, I think I can be an ideal boss who needs high problem solving ability and has a lot to learn based on this.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi! 

Oh, I love the first line!!! 
It would be so nice to have such a handsome boss from the drama. HAHAHA.
Anyways, I like the qualities you mentioned about an ideal boss. I guess, as long as they are kind, approachable and reliable, it would be perfect. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina 


Well, like a tall, handsome, rich man from the drama? HAHAHA, I'm just joking.
>> CORRECT.

First, you should have a smile face.
>> First, you should have a smiling face.

There is a Korean saying that you can't spit on a smiling face. If you smile, it means, you can't easily hate it or get angry.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or:  There’s a Korean saying that you can’t spit on a smiling face. If you smile, it’s harder to be hated or angered.

Rather than a person's blunt or angry expression, a smiling face will make the other person comfortable and will be easier to approach.
>> CORRECT.

Second, you should be able to get along with everyone easily.
>> CORRECT.

It is a factor that is related to the first factor, but if it is uncomfortable to approach, I think the atmosphere is also uncomfortable. Also, it's because you don't have a hard time finding help and you can learn your work well.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: This is related to the first factor, but if it’s uncomfortable to approach someone, the atmosphere becomes uncomfortable too. Also, it’s important because you won't have trouble seeking help, and you’ll be able to learn your work well.
>> Or: This is linked to the first factor, but if it’s difficult to approach someone, the atmosphere becomes uncomfortable as well. Additionally, being approachable helps you get assistance easily and learn your work more effectively.

Third, you need to be good at your work and have problem-solving skills.
>> CORRECT.

In order to solve the problem that occured without panicking, I think I can be an ideal boss who needs high problem solving ability and has a lot to learn based on this.
>> In order to solve problems without panicking, I think the ideal boss should possess strong problem-solving abilities and a willingness to learn.
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