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ESSAY: Some people think that children should go to kindergarten before attending primary school, while others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

I think sociality is the most important thing for mankind. You become a complete member of society by interacting with others and learning consideration.
Attending kindergarten can be a basic process to learn this. You can socialize from an early age, which helps you become a good human being.
However, learning family love may also be more helpful than socializing. Especially now that family relationships have diminished, it may be more helpful to add family heart.

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Hi there Lee! As we embrace the fun and relaxation that the weekend promises, let's also keep in mind the importance of balance! Productivity isn't just about work, it's also about how well we can rest and take care of ourselves.
Cheers to a fantastic Friday and an even better weekend!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think sociality is the most important thing for mankind.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> I believe that social connection is the most essential aspect of humanity.
 You become a complete member of society by interacting with others and learning consideration.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Attending kindergarten can be a basic process to learn this. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> Attending kindergarten can be a foundation for sociality.
You can socialize from an early age, which helps you become a good human being.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, learning family love may also be more helpful than socializing. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Especially now that family relationships have diminished, it may be more helpful to add family heart.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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