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My favorite looks in daily

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Actually we spend most of time in the our office. So I want to describe my first favorite looks in my office.
I love to wear dress shirts and slacks. I have an image that the career woman usually wear this look and it looks very cool.
Thus, I can't wait for this spring or autumn! I hope that temperature of these season will be warm to wear dress shirts!

Second, I love to wear cardigan buttoned up like sweater. I wear black colored cardigan like this style while writing this essay!
Therefore, I prefer a cardigan with flower patterns to plain one.

In addition, I must wear t-shirts which has colorful patterns in front of that when I enjoy the rock music festival!
Because there is no chance to wear clothes with loud patterns in daily.

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Hello there, Min!

I think you are a fashionista! You can rock floral, loud, and other designs in spite of South Korea being a plain-loving fashion country.

Perhaps the office style is now more functional and comfortable to make it easier to move around while maintaining the professional look. I fondly hope that you can wear all the wardrobe you prepped up for spring and autumn. I wish I could see you wear them too but I will leave it to my imagination. ^^

Anyway, the suggestions in grammar are underlined below. Compare them and make sure that you will follow these patterns on your next composition. You did a great job!

See you soon.

-T. Donna~

Actually we spend most of time in the our office. So I want to describe my first favorite looks in my office.
I love to wear dress shirts and slacks. I have an image that the career woman usually wear this look and it looks very cool.
Thus, I can't wait for this spring or autumn! I hope that temperature of these season will be warm to wear dress shirts!
>>Actually we spend most of the time in the our office. So I want to describe my first favorite look in my office.
I love to wear dress shirts and slacks. I have an image that a career woman usually wears this look and it looks very cool.
Thus, I can't wait for this spring or autumn! I hope that temperature of these seasons will be warm to wear dress shirts!


Second, I love to wear cardigan buttoned up like sweater. I wear black colored cardigan like this style while writing this essay!
Therefore, I prefer a cardigan with flower patterns to plain one.
>> Correct!

In addition, I must wear t-shirts which has colorful patterns in front of that when I enjoy the rock music festival!
Because there is no chance to wear clothes with loud patterns in daily.
>>  In addition, I must wear t-shirts which have colorful patterns in front when I enjoy the rock music festival! There is no chance to wear clothes with loud patterns daily.
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