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I\'m proud of myself for still living well.

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To be honest, I know my life is still very long.
So I'm not sure what I'm proud of right now.

So when I think about it, I'm proud of the fact that I live in this world.
Thank you for living tomorrow even though you are depressed and tired in this difficult and difficult world. Thank you for having a good family, and thank you for making good friends.

I'm not proud of anything in my life, but when I think about these questions, I feel grateful to the people around me.

But I think the most grateful thing is the teacher who always tells me that she is proud of me and encourages me not to have a hard time.

Thank you for always giving me generous advice and compliments.

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Hello there,

Dahea, your words are so heartfelt and beautiful. I'm so proud of you for recognizing the importance of gratitude, even when life feels difficult. It's truly inspiring to hear how you value your family, friends, and the people around you, especially the encouragement you've received. I'm also so happy  to be part of your journey and to hear that my support helps you.

You should absolutely be proud of yourself for living well, even in challenging times. Keep embracing the good moments, and know that you're doing wonderfully. I'm excited to continue seeing your growth!

~Teacher Cathy

               

To be honest, I know my life is still very long.

>>CORRECT

OR>>To be honest, I know that my life is still very long.

So I'm not sure what I'm proud of right now.

>>CORRECT

OR>>So, I'm not sure what I should be proud of right now.

So when I think about it, I'm proud of the fact that I live in this world.

>>CORRECT

OR>>So, when I think about it, I'm proud of the fact that I exist in this world.

Thank you for living tomorrow even though you are depressed and tired in this difficult and difficult world.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Thank you for continuing to live tomorrow, even though you are depressed and tired in this difficult world.

Thank you for having a good family, and thank you for making good friends.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Thank you for having a loving family, and thank you for making good friends.

I'm not proud of anything in my life, but when I think about these questions, I feel grateful to the people around me.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I'm not proud of anything in my life, but when I reflect on these questions, I feel grateful for the people around me.

But I think the most grateful thing is the teacher who always tells me that she is proud of me and encourages me not to have a hard time.

>>CORRECT

OR>>But I think the thing I'm most grateful for is the teacher who always tells me she's proud of me and encourages me not to struggle.

Thank you for always giving me generous advice and compliments.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Thank you for always offering me generous advice and compliments.

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