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Everyone hurts others with words, and you don't know if you hurt the other person.
In order to know that, you need to have some indicators based on accurate statistics, but it varies from person to person, and if you want to know that, you need to take the time and build a friendship with that person.

When I gave my friends "honest feedback" in the past, they left me.
In other words, honest feedback also means that I really want to say what I want to say.

Things like balance can't match from the beginning, and honest feedback doesn't exist in the world.
At least that's what I believe.

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Hello,

Your reflection is deep and shows that you're thinking critically about how words can affect others. I really appreciate your honesty in sharing how giving "honest feedback" led to misunderstandings with your friends. It's true that communication can be tricky, and it's important to understand how the other person might feel. Your point about the difficulty of finding a balance and the absence of perfect "honest feedback" is also really thoughtful.

I can see you're making great strides in expressing your ideas in English, and I'm proud of your progress! Keep exploring and reflecting on these meaningful topics, you're doing amazing!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Everyone hurts others with words, and you don't know if you hurt the other person.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Everyone hurts others with their words, and you may not even realize when you do.

In order to know that, you need to have some indicators based on accurate statistics, but it varies from person to person, and if you want to know that, you need to take the time and build a friendship with that person.

>>CORRECT

OR>>To know that, you need indicators based on accurate statistics, but since it varies from person to person, you must take the time to build a friendship with them.

When I gave my friends "honest feedback" in the past, they left me.

>>CORRECT

OR>>In the past, when I gave my friends 'honest feedback,' they ended up leaving me.

In other words, honest feedback also means that I really want to say what I want to say.

>>CORRECT

OR>>In other words, honest feedback means that I genuinely want to express what I feel.

Things like balance can't match from the beginning, and honest feedback doesn't exist in the world.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Things like balance can't be achieved from the beginning, and honest feedback doesn't truly exist in the world.

At least that's what I believe.

>>CORRECT

OR>>At least, that's what I believe.

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