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There is a difference between what people feel is dangerous.
There are also people who don't feel dangerous in the difference.
For example, gamblers, thieves, criminals, drug offenders, etc.

Usually, these people have the silly idea that "it's possible if it's me," no matter how dangerous it is.
Or, there are people who make the mistake of taking care of their lives with the luck of "It was okay last time, so it's okay this time."

In any case, taking risks in your life should be avoided as much as possible, and even if you do something dangerous, you should do it within the scope of your own solution.
For example, I think it's brave to take risks within the legal categories of starting a business or challenging a new test.

It depends on what kind of risk you feel, but I hope everyone is doing well and everyone is full of happiness.
Especially my pretty teacher, I wish you all the best :)

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Hi Dahea!

Your thoughts here are really insightful! You¡¯ve done a great job explaining how people sometimes underestimate the dangers of certain things because they believe "it won't happen to me." This is an important point to recognize, and you¡¯ve shared it in a clear and thoughtful way.

I also love how you pointed out that taking risks is okay when it's done within safe and legal boundaries, like starting a business or taking on new challenges. That's a great perspective! I¡¯m so proud of your progress in expressing complex ideas like this in English. You¡¯re improving so much, and I¡¯m honored to have such a wonderful student like you.

~Teacher Cathy

 

There is a difference between what people feel is dangerous.

>>CORRECT

OR>>There is a difference in what people perceive as dangerous.

There are also people who don't feel dangerous in the difference.

>>There are also people who don't perceive the difference as dangerous.

For example, gamblers, thieves, criminals, drug offenders, etc.

>>CORRECT

OR>>For example, gamblers, thieves, criminals, drug offenders, and others.

Usually, these people have the silly idea that "it's possible if it's me," no matter how dangerous it is.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Usually, these people have the misguided belief that 'it's possible if it's me,' no matter how dangerous it may be.

Or, there are people who make the mistake of taking care of their lives with the luck of "It was okay last time, so it's okay this time."

>>CORRECT

OR>>Or, there are people who make the mistake of taking their lives for granted, thinking, 'It was okay last time, so it will be okay this time.

In any case, taking risks in your life should be avoided as much as possible, and even if you do something dangerous, you should do it within the scope of your own solution.

>>CORRECT

OR>>In any case, taking risks in life should be avoided as much as possible, and even when doing something dangerous, it should be done within the limits of your own control.

For example, I think it's brave to take risks within the legal categories of starting a business or challenging a new test.

>>CORRECT

OR>>For example, I believe it's brave to take risks within the legal boundaries of starting a business or taking on a new challenge.

It depends on what kind of risk you feel, but I hope everyone is doing well and everyone is full of happiness.

>>CORRECT

OR>>It depends on the kind of risk you perceive, but I hope everyone is doing well and filled with happiness.

Especially my pretty teacher, I wish you all the best :)

>>CORRECT

OR>>Especially to my pretty teacher, I wish you all the best :)

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