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What would you do if you had more free time?

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First, I would watch my favorite drama again with a spicy food .
Because I am studying for teacher certification test every day, so I don't want to spend energy for something.
And these are my favorite things to do!

Second, I would meet my friends and hang out with them.
It is the same reason with upper contents.
When I hang out with them, I feel happy and I can get an energy from them.

I really want free time!

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Hello Nicole!
You did a great job with the essay today. Reading this was so fun for me. Thanks for your effort! See you next time and have a happy Lunar New Year!
~~Teacher Kate 

First, I would watch my favorite drama again with a spicy food.
>>First, I would watch my favorite drama again while eating spicy food.
Because I am studying for teacher certification test every day, so I don't want to spend energy for something.
>>Because I study for the teacher certification test every day, I don¡¯t want to spend energy on anything else.
And these are my favorite things to do!
>>These are my favorite things to do!
Second, I would meet my friends and hang out with them.
>>CORRECT!
It is the same reason with upper contents. When I hang out with them, I feel happy and I can get an energy from them.
>>For the same reason as mentioned above, when I hang out with them, I feel happy, and I can gain energy from them.
I really want free time!
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: I really want some free time!

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