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Giving money to young people

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There are many things more important than money for young people. In particular, I think it is important encouraginge them to have the courage to pursue great dreams. Simply giving money to them may spoil them because they can¡¯t learn the value of hard work.

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Take a moment today to reflect on the small victories you¡¯ve had so far this week, Ms. Rachel. Maybe it was crossing off an important task or simply staying positive in the face of difficulty. No accomplishment is too small to celebrate. Gratitude fuels motivation and helps shift your mindset from what¡¯s lacking to what¡¯s possible.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
There are many things more important than money for young people. 
>>> There are more important things to give young people than money.
In particular, I think it is important encouraginge them to have the courage to pursue great dreams.
>>> In particular, I believe it's crucial to encourage them to have the courage to chase after big dreams.
 Simply giving money to them may spoil them because they can¡¯t learn the value of hard work.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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