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I asked the same question to me and to my family on New Year's Day.
Even now, my wish is the same.
I want everyone involved with me and me to be happy.
I'm doing a lot of activities.
I am playing the violin and the recorder, playing golf and exercise, and studying English.
However, I want all of these to be fun activities without being considered a heavy loads.
I saw again how beautiful this world is by playing an instruments.
This is why the world looked beautiful because I was happy with my performance.
I would never be happy if my activities are like doing hard homework.
Let's all be happy~~

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Hi David. Your homework is truly inspiring and beautifully written! I love how you expressed your wish for happiness, not just for yourself but for everyone connected to you. It¡¯s so heartfelt and thoughtful. The way you described your various activities, from playing instruments to studying English, shows your passion for learning and growth. It¡¯s especially touching how you find joy in these activities and see the world¡¯s beauty through them. Your positive outlook is contagious, and the closing message, "Let¡¯s all be happy," brings everything together in such a warm way. Keep up the great work!


~ T. Lia


I asked the same question to me and to my family on New Year's Day.
>> I asked myself and my family the same question on New Year's Day.


Even now, my wish is the same.
>> CORRECT


I want everyone involved with me and me to be happy.
>> I want everyone involved with me, including myself, to be happy.


I¡¯m doing a lot of activities.
>> CORRECT


I am playing the violin and the recorder, playing golf and exercise, and studying English.
>> I am playing the violin and the recorder, playing golf, exercising, and studying English.


However, I want all of these to be fun activities without being considered a heavy loads.
>> However, I want all of these to be fun activities without being considered heavy loads.


I saw again how beautiful this world is by playing an instruments.
>> I saw again how beautiful this world is by playing instruments.


This is why the world looked beautiful because I was happy with my performance.
>> The world looked beautiful to me because I was happy with my performance.


I would never be happy if my activities are like doing hard homework.
>> I would never be happy if my activities felt like doing hard homework.


Let's all be happy~~
>> CORRECT or

>> Let's all be happy!

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