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Cats and dogs are the most common types of pets. What are some unusual or exotic pets that you have heard of?

>>> I actually had raised hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years. Their names are ox and cow because that time was a period where I started to study English hard and ox and cow are what I first learned at that time. When I put them on my hand, I could feel their legs and movements vividly. But because I was too young to raise living things, finally they went.

I also had raised chick for only three days. I bought and brought it from chick seller in front of my elementary school entrance. After school, when I saw them on the way back home, I couldn't tear my eyes from chicks in box because they are so cute. I couldn't help buying it immediately. But unfortunately, It went because it dived into water that I gave for quench its thirst. I remember that after buring it, my mom gave me a chocolate to console me.

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Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
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Cats and dogs are the most common types of pets. What are some unusual or exotic pets that you have heard of?

>>> I actually had raised hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years. 
>> I actually had raised a hermit crab when I was 7 years old for two years. 
Their names are ox and cow because that time was a period where I started to study English hard and ox and cow are what I first learned at that time. 
>> CORRECT!
When I put them on my hand, I could feel their legs and movements vividly. 
>> CORRECT!
But because I was too young to raise living things, finally they went.
>> CORRECT!
I also had raised chick for only three days. 
>> I also had raised a chick for only three days. 
I bought and brought it from chick seller in front of my elementary school entrance. 
>> CORRECT!
After school, when I saw them on the way back home, I couldn't tear my eyes from chicks in box because they are so cute. 
>> After school, when I saw them on the way back home, I couldn't tear my eyes from chicks in the box because they are so cute. 
I couldn't help buying it immediately. 
>> CORRECT!
But unfortunately, It went because it dived into water that I gave for quench its thirst. 
>> But unfortunately, it went because it dived into the water that I gave to quench its thirst. 
I remember that after buring it, my mom gave me a chocolate to console me.
>> I remember that after burying it, my mom gave me a chocolate to console me.

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