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ESSAY: Nowadays people¡¯s life is changing rapidly and, as a result, family relationships are affected. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

To be honest, it can be asserted that today's humans are living a much richer life than those of the past.
It is through advances in science, computer science, and mathematics, and I agree that it will develop further in the future.
However, it cannot be said that the present has a happier relationship than in the past. Rather, our relationship is looser than before.
It is the same for the family, but the conversation between the family is reduced and they are interested in electronic devices, including smartphones, so they cannot think of members.
To be honest, I think the old family relationship has long been a relic of the old days.

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Wishing you a productive and peaceful Tuesday ahead Lee! Let¡¯s make today count with all the energy and passion we have. Here¡¯s to tackling the day with focus and enthusiasm! Have a good one!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
To be honest, it can be asserted that today's humans are living a much richer life than those of the past.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> It can certainly be argued that, compared to those of the past, people today are living much richer and more fulfilling lives.
It is through advances in science, computer science, and mathematics, and I agree that it will develop further in the future.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, it cannot be said that the present has a happier relationship than in the past. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Rather, our relationship is looser than before.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It is the same for the family, but the conversation between the family is reduced and they are interested in electronic devices, including smartphones, so they cannot think of members.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
To be honest, I think the old family relationship has long been a relic of the old days.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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