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What was the most expensive gift you ever gave to someone?

작성자: 노*철
2025-01-21 34

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I have given a lot of money unconditionally to a friend who is in financial difficulty, and I have given a car as a gift to my wife, but strictly speaking, it is difficult to say that these are gifts.
The most memorable expensive gift was a gift to the family of my senior staff.
This senior staff has been working at my dental clinic for 18 years.
It was about 13 years ago.
Senior staff Yoon's family had a hard time financially.
Her husband made a friend's loan guarantee, but it went wrong, so she had a hard time financially.
Her family moved into a small apartment and needed a TV to put in the living room.
I congratulated Ms. Yoon’s family on their move and gave them a TV and audio system as a gift.
It cost about $2,000, but I didn't feel any waste at all to see the family happy.
We cannot judge the value of a gift by its amount, but the joy they feel when they receive a gift of an amount they cannot afford is incomparable to anything.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi David! Your account of the gifts you've given, especially the story about helping Ms. Yoon's family, is heartwarming and inspiring. The way you detailed their struggles and your thoughtful gesture shows how much you care about the people in your life. The emphasis on the joy and gratitude a meaningful gift brings rather than its monetary value is truly touching. Your writing captures the essence of generosity beautifully. It’s well-written and conveys your message with sincerity and clarity. Excellent work!


~ T. Lia


I have given a lot of money unconditionally to a friend who is in financial difficulty, and I have given a car as a gift to my wife, but strictly speaking, it is difficult to say that these are gifts.
>> I have given a lot of money unconditionally to a friend who was in financial difficulty, and I have given a car as a gift to my wife, but strictly speaking, it is difficult to say that these are true gifts.


The most memorable expensive gift was a gift to the family of my senior staff.
>> The most memorable expensive gift I gave was to the family of my senior staff.


This senior staff has been working at my dental clinic for 18 years.
>> This senior staff member has been working at my dental clinic for 18 years.


It was about 13 years ago.
>> CORRECT


Senior staff Yoon's family had a hard time financially.
>> Senior staff member Yoon's family was going through financial difficulties.


Her husband made a friend's loan guarantee, but it went wrong, so she had a hard time financially.
>> Her husband guaranteed a friend's loan, but it went wrong, leaving her family in financial difficulty.


Her family moved into a small apartment and needed a TV to put in the living room.
>> CORRECT


I congratulated Ms. Yoon’s family on their move and gave them a TV and audio system as a gift.

>> CORRECT


It cost about $2,000, but I didn't feel any waste at all to see the family happy.

>> It cost about $2,000, but I didn't feel it was a waste at all because seeing the family happy was priceless.


We cannot judge the value of a gift by its amount, but the joy they feel when they receive a gift of an amount they cannot afford is incomparable to anything.
>> We cannot judge the value of a gift by its cost, but the joy people feel when receiving something they could not afford is incomparable to anything else.

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