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The brake pedal malfunctioned on the frozen road

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2025-01-20 13

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It snowed very strong 2 weeks ago in Korea. So all road was frozen because of melting snow and super cold weather.
At that time I drove my car very slowly, almost 30km/h speeds.
Before I turned the car to the right, I brake a car to stop mine. But I can't stop the car easily because there is a big ice on the road!
The steering wheel was shaken left and right, and I was frightened if I hit another car.
My car was sliding on the icy road at three times through all my way.
Fortunately, there was no accident that I crushed into the sidewalk, trees, and another car!

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Hi there, Min!

What a scary experience on the road! The snowy road is truly unpredictable and risky at times. Even if you drive slowly, it can still be difficult to calculate. You were right, driving in practice is totally different in theory. If you are there, things around you could easily change.

I must say you were very lucky at the time. Thanks to your critical thoughts and quick thinking.

Please go over the grammar suggestions below. Adverbs are words that describe a verb. You can place them before or after an action word. In addition, when you use nouns in general, they are always in the plural form. Lastly, there are so many verb phrase idioms in the English language such as 'press the break', etc. You will learn more as you speak more.

Thank you for sending this homework answer. I really appreciate all your efforts. Great job! See you.

-T. Donna~

It snowed very strong 2 weeks ago in Korea. So all road was frozen because of melting snow and super cold weather.
>> It snowed very strongly two weeks ago in Korea. So all roads were frozen because of melting snow and super cold weather.

At that time I drove my car very slowly, almost 30km/h speeds.
>>  At the time, I drove my car very slowly, almost 30km/h speed.

Before I turned the car to the right, I brake a car to stop mine. But I can't stop the car easily because there is a big ice on the road!
>> Before I turned the car to the right, I pressed the brake to stop mine but I can't stop the car easily because there is a big ice on the road!

The steering wheel was shaken left and right, and I was frightened if I hit another car.
>> Correct!

My car was sliding on the icy road at three times through all my way.
>> My car was sliding on the icy road three times in all directions.

Fortunately, there was no accident that I crushed into the sidewalk, trees, and another car! 
>> Fortunately, there was no accident where I crushed into the sidewalk, trees, and (or another/ other cars?! 
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