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Which is the best decision, marrying at a young age or marrying at an older age?

작성자: 손*희
2025-01-16 93

회원님의 영작문

First, economic stability plays a crucial role in marital life. Marrying young often places individuals in financially unstable situations. However, those who marry later in life are more likely to be in a stable professional position, which contributes to the quality of their marriage. Financial stability is essential for couples to plan for the future together and to provide the necessary resources for raising children.
Second, marrying later in life provides opportunities for continued personal growth and development. Young individuals often focus on marriage and family, sometimes sacrificing their dreams or goals. However, marrying at an older age allows couples to support each other's aspirations and create an environment conducive to personal growth. This positively impacts both partners and enriches their marital life.
In conclusion, marrying at an older age offers numerous benefits that contribute to the stability and happiness of a marriage.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Hana! Good points! You raised valid insights about this topic. Marriage is a huge decision, so it shouldn't be taken lightly. One has to be ready before making this kind of commitment. Let us talk more about it in the class. See you!
--Teacher Anji

First, economic stability plays a crucial role in marital life. 
>> CORRECT
Marrying young often places individuals in financially unstable situations. 
>> CORRECT
However, those who marry later in life are more likely to be in a stable professional position, which contributes to the quality of their marriage.
>> However, those who marry later in life are more likely to be in a stable professional position, contributing to the quality of their marriage
Financial stability is essential for couples to plan for the future together and to provide the necessary resources for raising children.
>> Financial stability is essential for couples to plan for the future together and provide the necessary resources for raising children.
Second, marrying later in life provides opportunities for continued personal growth and development. 
>> CORRECT
Young individuals often focus on marriage and family, sometimes sacrificing their dreams or goals. 
>> CORRECT
However, marrying at an older age allows couples to support each other's aspirations and create an environment conducive to personal growth.
>> CORRECT
This positively impacts both partners and enriches their marital life.
>> This positively impacts both partners and enriches their marital lives.
In conclusion, marrying at an older age offers numerous benefits that contribute to the stability and happiness of a marriage.
>> CORRECT
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