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What is the best thing about your job?

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Well, the fact that I can meet a lot of handsome people? HAHAHA, I'm joking.
The best thing about my job is that I can have a lot of special experiences.
My job is peculiarly in the army. That's why I can have a lot of special experience as a computer engineer, dealing with special equipment and using programs different from ordinary equipment.
It's also about being abble to take pride.
All the coworkers I work with take pride in their jobs. And they also have a special pride in working for the country and people because they work for the army.

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Hi! 

Thank you for sharing your answer. You got me in the first sentence. . Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your essay, and I can tell you¡¯re passionate about your job. The way you described the pride you and your coworkers take in serving the country is inspiring.

~ Teacher Gina


Well, the fact that I can meet a lot of handsome people? HAHAHA, I'm joking.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Well, I could say meeting a lot of handsome people, but I'm joking.

The best thing about my job is that I can have a lot of special experiences.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The greatest thing about my job is the opportunity to have unique experiences.

My job is peculiarly in the army. 
>> My job is peculiar in the army.
>> Or: My job is quite unique because it is in the army.

That's why I can have a lot of special experience as a computer engineer, dealing with special equipment and using programs different from ordinary equipment.
>> This allows me to gain unique experiences as a computer engineer, working with specialized equipment and using programs that differ from standard ones.

It's also about being abble to take pride.
>> It's also about being able to take pride in what I do.

All the coworkers I work with take pride in their jobs. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: All my coworkers take pride in their work.

And they also have a special pride in working for the country and people because they work for the army.
>> They also feel a deep sense of pride in serving the country and its people through their work in the army.
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