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What qualities do you admire most in your son?

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What qualities do you admire most in your son?

There are big points of two.
One thing is that I'm admiring in his optimistic.
And he is always thinking about something that he can do it everyting.
It makes him success from many tries and faulses.
The other thing is that I'm admiring in his smile.
Sometimes, He make me angry because, it is very dangerous for him to do that.I know that he didn't do it on purpose.
But, he make it even though I warn about that. and then
I feel very nervous and used to shout loudly in that case.
As you know, After moms experience this situation, they're in a lot pain. I felt, too.
I'm worried about his mind, but he always contact me with smile.
Also, he used to change atmosphere to humorously.
I admire his sence of humor, sometimes.

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Hello, Stella! Your son is truly adorable. Kids are like that. They tend to be naughty at times and make us upset, but they're our source of happiness.^^ Thank you for doing your homework! Have a great day!
~T. Jewel
There are big points of two.
>>There are two main points.
One thing is that I'm admiring in his optimistic.
>>One thing I admire about him is his optimism.
And he is always thinking about something that he can do it everyting.
>>He is always thinking about something that he can do with everything.
It makes him success from many tries and faulses.
>>It helps him succeed through many tries and failures.
OR
>>It allows him to succeed after many attempts and failures.
The other thing is that I'm admiring in his smile.
>>The other thing is that I admire his smile.
Sometimes, He make me angry because, it is very dangerous for him to do that.
>>Sometimes, he makes me angry because it is very dangerous for him to do that.
I know that he didn't do it on purpose.
>>CORRECT
But, he make it even though I warn about that. and then
>>But, he still does it even though I warn him about it.
I feel very nervous and used to shout loudly in that case.
>>I feel very nervous and I tend to shout loudly in that case.
As you know, After moms experience this situation, they're in a lot pain.
>>As you know, after moms experience this situation, they're in a lot of pain.
I felt, too.
>>I felt that way, too.
I'm worried about his mind, but he always contact me with smile.
>>I'm worried about his mind, but he always contacts me with a smile.
Also, he used to change atmosphere to humorously.
>>Also, he used to change the atmosphere to a humorous one.
I admire his sence of humor, sometimes.
>>Sometimes, I admire his sense of humor.
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