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What is the best mode of transport for you?

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Well, the transportation I use often is the bus, but I think the best transportation for me is the subway.
Bus is a common transportation, but it consume a lot of time because of its long bus time and easy traffic jams.
On the other hand, airplane is less time consuming but very expensive. In addition, it can be difficult to use because it is a mode of transportation that is heavily influenced by the weather and operates only in special places called airports.
The subway is a means of transportation that adds to the best advantages of bus and airplane.
The dispatch time is short, the fare is reasonable, and I can keep the appointment. And because it is an underground transportation, it is not affected by the weather.
That's why the subway seems to be the best mode of transportation for me.

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Hi, 

Thanks for letting me read your essay! You made a great comparison of transportation options and clearly explained why the subway stands out for you. Your ideas are well thought out and convincing. 

~ Teacher Gina



Well, the transportation I use often is the bus, but I think the best transportation for me is the subway.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I frequently use the bus, but I believe the subway is the best mode of transportation for me.

Bus is a common transportation, but it consume a lot of time because of its long bus time and easy traffic jams.
>> The bus is a common form of transportation, but it consumes a lot of time due to long intervals and frequent traffic jams.

On the other hand, airplane is less time consuming but very expensive. 
>> On the other hand, airplanes save time but are very expensive.

In addition, it can be difficult to use because it is a mode of transportation that is heavily influenced by the weather and operates only in special places called airports.
>> Furthermore, airplanes can be inconvenient because they are heavily influenced by weather conditions and only operate from specific locations like airports.

The subway is a means of transportation that adds to the best advantages of bus and airplane.
>> The subway combines the best advantages of both buses and airplanes.

The dispatch time is short, the fare is reasonable, and I can keep the appointment. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Subway schedules are frequent, fares are affordable, and it allows me to be punctual.

And because it is an underground transportation, it is not affected by the weather.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Additionally, since it operates underground, it is not affected by the weather.

That's why the subway seems to be the best mode of transportation for me.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: This is why I consider the subway the best mode of transportation for me.
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