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The benefits of working on weekends.

작성자: 송*훈
2025-01-12 245

회원님의 영작문



Thank you Camille!

I appreciate your kindness. Me and my colleague had a good time.
We both had courage and extra power for new week!
Have nice day :)

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Diego! Thank you for taking time in answering the question ~ and you're always welcome. :)
~ T. Camille

What are the possible benefits of working on weekends?

 Since the government started five-day workweek and abolished overtime work, people
greeted the government decesion. 
>> Since the government started a five-day workweek and abolished overtime work, people greeted the government's decision.
However, nobody knew the counter effects of that
policies.
>> HOwever, nobody knew about the counter effects of that policy.

 Nowadays, countries which claimed working welfare, reducing labor time have been
undergone loss of competitve power in world market. Such as German 'Volkswagenwerk' automobile company. 
>> Nowadays, countries which claimed working welfare, reducing labor timne have been undergoing loss of competitiv power in the world market, such as Germany's  "Volkswagenwerk" automobile company.
Germany was famous for advanced working
welfare. 
>> CORRECT!
The wage was high and labor time was short among OECD countries. 
>> CORRECT!
However,
not only Germany but also European countries lost competencies, so their industries had been shut down or sold to America which still persist high labor pressure against
employees.
>> CORRECT!

 Reality on the ground is grim. 
>> CORRECT!
The more you work harder, the more fruits can be earned. 
>> CORRECT!
Peace was never an option, if you want to survive in global market.
>> Peace is never an option, if you want to survive in the global market.

 If one person work in weekends, a man(or she) might improve working abilities of himself(or herself). 
>> CORRECT!
This will lead him(or her) to obtain higher chances to get highly paid. 
>> CORRECT!

 What if a nation encourages overwork or working on weekends? 
>> CORRECT!
Probably public won't agree to government. 
>> Probably the public won't agree with the government.
However nation competencies will increase and when the crisises
occur such as global economic crisises, the nation can break through them.
>> However, national competencies will increase, and when the crises occur such as global economic crises, the nation can break through them.

These are reasons why I agree to work in weekends. 
>> CORRECT!
That is why I am studying at Sunday afternoon, writing my essay. 
>> That is why I am studying even on a Sunday afternoon, writing my essay.

We all know th story about 'The Ant and The Grasshopper.' 
>> CORRECT!
Winter is comming, prepare for it.
>> CORRECT!
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