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What¡¯s something you¡¯re thankful for your family?

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Most people show their appreciation because they received something from someone or when they get help.
So do I.
But the family is different from the others.
I work hard for my family, help them financially, solve difficult tasks, etc., but sometimes I think I don't get a proper appreciation from them.
However, family is something that can be appreciated just by its existence.
What I am most grateful to my family is to be by my side in the name of family.
What's the other reason than this?
Maybe other reasons are the smallest ones.
And that's probably why I live as a husband and a father.

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Most people show their appreciation when they receive something from someone or get help.
>> CORRECT


So do I.
>> CORRECT


But family is different from others.
>> CORRECT


I work hard for my family, help them financially, solve difficult tasks, etc., but sometimes I feel like I don¡¯t get proper appreciation from them.
>> CORRECT


However, family is something that can be appreciated just for its existence.
>> CORRECT


What I am most grateful for about my family is that they are by my side in the name of family.
>> CORRECT


What other reason could there be than this?
>> CORRECT


Maybe the other reasons are the smallest ones.
>> CORRECT


And that¡¯s probably why I live as a husband and a father.
>
> CORRECT

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