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It might be only one chance to go forien country.
It is common we don't go to the country again which I've been there once.
Because there are so many country in the world I want to travel .
Taking photos for me at the hot place is the best tourism service.
Plus they give the tip of pose to us.
They know which pose is the prettier than we posed.
We like to leave a photoshot for certification within our face.
Especially Korean like it than other countries ones.

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Good day, Ms. Sunny!
We customers are always looking for some tourism services that will satisfy us. From your story, you have more memories that can be seen through photos. That is great to hear, aside from having memories from a certain place, you re also giving a person a chance  to earn a living.
Have a great travel experience each time you visit a certain place.
Aki~


It might be only one chance to go forien country.
>>> It might be only one chance to go to a foreign country.

It is common we don't go to the country again which I've been there once.
>>>  It is common for us that we don't go to the country again which we've been to once.
>>> I usually do not go back to a country that I already visited.

Because there are so many country in the world I want to travel .
>>> Because there are so many countries in the world I want to visit.
>>> Because I want to travel in many countries of the world.

Taking photos for me at the hot place is the best tourism service.
>>>  Taking photos at a hot place is the best tourism service for me.

Plus they give the tip of pose to us.
>>> Because they give us tips on how to pose in front of the camera.

They know which pose is the prettier than we posed.
>>> They know which pose is better before they shot the picture.

We like to leave a photoshot for certification within our face.
>>> We like to have a remembrance through the photoshoot.

Especially Korean like it than other countries ones.
>>> Especially us, Koreans like that than other nationalities.

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