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Is there an advertisement that made an impression on you when you were a child?à Yes, I remember an animated commercial for a candy brand from mychildhood. Its catchy jingle and colorful visuals left a lasting impression on me.

Do you like taking selfies?Do you like taking photos?à Yes, I enjoy taking photos, especially of nature and special moments. I takeselfies occasionally, but I prefer capturing landscapes.

Do you think sending emails will be more or less popular in the future?Is sending emails popular in your country?à Emails might become less popular for casual communication due tomessaging apps, but they¡¯ll remain essential for formal purposes. They¡¯re widelyused in my country for business.

When would you send emails to others?Do you often send emails?à I send emails often, mostly for work or school-related tasks. I use emails forformal communication like sharing documents or making inquiries.

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Hey there, Young In! Please check the following. Please take note to avoid copying most of the major vocabulary words  from the questions. Try to paraphrase some of them if possible. 
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Is there an advertisement that made an impression on you when you were a child?Yes, I remember an animated commercial for a candy brand from mychildhood. Its catchy jingle and colorful visuals left a lasting impression on me.
>>Yes, I vividly remember an animated commercial for a candy brand from my childhood. Its catchy jingle and vibrant visuals were so captivating that they left a lasting impression on me, even years later.

Do you like taking selfies?Do you like taking photos?
Yes, I enjoy taking photos, especially of nature and special moments. I takeselfies occasionally, but I prefer capturing landscapes.
>>Yes, I thoroughly enjoy taking pictures, particularly of nature and speacial moments. While I occasionally take selfies, my preference leans toward capturing picturesque landscapes or candid moments that tell a story.

Do you think sending emails will be more or less popular in the future?Is sending emails popular in your country?
Emails might become less popular for casual communication due tomessaging apps, but they¡¯ll remain essential for formal purposes. They¡¯re widelyused in my country for business.
>>I believe emails may become less common for casual interactions due to the dominance of instant messaging apps. However, they will undoubtedly remain indispensable for formal and professional communication. In my country, emails are widely utilized for business correspondence and official matters.

When would you send emails to others?Do you often send emails?
I send emails often, mostly for work or school-related tasks. I use emails forformal communication like sharing documents or making inquiries.
>>I frequently send emails, primarily for work or academic purposes. They are my go-to for formal communication, whether it¡¯s sharing important documents, making inquiries, or coordinating professional tasks.
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