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When I went traveling alone.
I wanted to get rid of my stress from my family.
Living together with someone needs patience and sacrifice each other.
But they give me a feeling of happiness too.
Whenever I travel alone I change my mind to the positive thinking.
I prefer travel with my friends to travel my family or traveling alone.
Because strangers can see me wired.

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Ms. Sunny!
Many young people these days are enjoying traveling alone. In Korea, you call it the "working holiday" where they go abroad to work and experience the culture of another country. They are very brave. It gives them a chance to understand life while exploring the other side of the world. For us, who are married and have children, it is hard to consider such. 
Thank you for this!
Aki~


When I went traveling alone. I wanted to get rid of my stress from my family.
>>> When I went traveling alone, I wanted to get rid of my stress about my family.

Living together with someone needs patience and sacrifice each other.
>>> Living together with someone needs patience and sacrifice for each other.

But they give me a feeling of happiness too.
>>>  CORRECT!

Whenever I travel alone I change my mind to the positive thinking.
>>>  Whenever I travel alone I change my mind to positive thinking.
>>> Traveling alone gives me a sense of positivity.

I prefer travel with my friends to travel my family or traveling alone.
>>> I prefer traveling with my friends than traveling with family or by myself.

Because strangers can see me wired.
>>> Because strangers might see me as weird.

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