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Is technology developing faster than it used to? Are you worried about being left behind?

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2025-01-07 350

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I believe technology is developing faster than it used to be, also I am concerned about being left behind and replaced. There is one main reason why technoloy evolving faster than past.
Technology is related and interactive since 21th century. An well known automobile company owner said, 'automobile industry does not belongs to heavy industires anymore, now it belongs to electronic industries.' This kind of revloution happens variously in diverse market. At past, technoloy remained in their own field, however nowadays it doesn't have own fields. This makes thechnology evolve more faster and more diverse.
In 19th century, there was a movement whcih refused to use machines in industry area, because laborers felt threat which they can be replaced by machines. This event isn't surprising today. A.I already started to replace designers and prgrammers. Specialists prospect more than 2000 job position can be replaced by AI technology.
However I won't be stay still to be replaced. I will

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Diego!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille

I believe technology is developing faster than it used to be, also I am concerned about being left behind and replaced. 
>> CORRECT!
There is one main reason why technoloy evolving faster than past.
>> There is one main reason why technoloy is evolving faster than the past.
Technology is related and interactive since 21th century. 
>> Technology is related and interactive since the 21st century. 
An well known automobile company owner said, 'automobile industry does not belongs to heavy industires anymore, now it belongs to electronic industries.' 
>> A well-known automobile company owner said, 'automobile industry does not belong to heavy industries anymore, now it belongs to electronic industries.' 
This kind of revloution happens variously in diverse markets. 
>> CORRECT!
At past, technoloy remained in their own field, however nowadays it doesn't have own fields. 
>> In the past, technoloy remained in their own field, however nowadays it doesn't have its own fields. 
This makes technology evolve more faster and more diverse.
>> CORRECT!
In the 19th century, there was a movement which refused to use machines in industry area, because laborers felt threat which they can be replaced by machines. 
>> In the 19th century, there was a movement which refused to use machines in the industrial area, because laborers felt threat which they can be replaced by machines.
This event isn't surprising today. 
>> CORRECT!
A.I already started to replace designers and programmers. 
>> CORRECT!
Specialists prospect more than 2000 job positions can be replaced by AI technology.
>> CORRECT!
However I won't be stay still to be replaced. 
>> However I won't stay still to be replaced. 
I will
>> I will work harder and do way better, because I believe there are things that AI cannot do.
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