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\"Lessons I\'ve Learned from My Favorite Movies\".

작성자: 노*철
2025-01-07 121

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The movie I watched most impressed is "Poseidon Adventure".
It was made about 45 years ago, and I watched it on TV when I was a college student.
Many people died and only a few survived as the ship from New York to Athens overturned after meeting an undersea earthquake, and I still remember his words praying as if the pastor was screaming at God at the end.
They overcome the difficult process well and encounter situations that cannot be solved in the final stage.
To solve the situation, the pastor talked to God at the expense of his body.
"God, we have come this far by our strength.
If you can't help us, please don't disturb us."
He sacrificed his body to save others by saying so.
Through this film, I realized that our active actions, not prayers, are so important in our efforts to seek God's help.
And I realized that God wants to change the situation itself to solve the difficult situation, but in many ways he wants to leave the situation as it is and change us human beings,

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi David! I really enjoyed reading your response to the essay topic. Your reflection on The Poseidon Adventure was both profound and thought-provoking. I loved how you highlighted the pastor’s sacrifice and how it symbolized the importance of taking action alongside faith. Your insight about God sometimes choosing to change us instead of the situation itself really resonated with me. It reminded me that personal growth often comes through challenges rather than their removal. Thank you for sharing such a meaningful realization. It truly gave me a new perspective!


~ T. Lia


The movie I watched most impressed is "Poseidon Adventure".
>> The movie that impressed me the most is "The Poseidon Adventure."


It was made about 45 years ago, and I watched it on TV when I was a college student.
>> CORRECT


Many people died and only a few survived as the ship from New York to Athens overturned after meeting an undersea earthquake, and I still remember his words praying as if the pastor was screaming at God at the end.
>> Many people died, and only a few survived when the ship traveling from New York to Athens overturned after encountering an undersea earthquake. I still remember the pastor's words as he prayed, screaming to God at the end.


They overcome the difficult process well and encounter situations that cannot be solved in the final stage.
>> They overcame many challenges and faced situations that seemed unsolvable in the final stage.


To solve the situation, the pastor talked to God at the expense of his body.
>> To resolve the situation, the pastor sacrificed himself while speaking to God.


"God, we have come this far by our strength. If you can't help us, please don't disturb us."

>> CORRECT


He sacrificed his body to save others by saying so.
>> CORRECT


Through this film, I realized that our active actions, not prayers, are so important in our efforts to seek God's help.
>> Through this film, I realized that our active efforts, not just prayers, are crucial in seeking God's help.


And I realized that God wants to change the situation itself to solve the difficult situation, but in many ways he wants to leave the situation as it is and change us human beings,
>> I also realized that while we might expect God to change the situation to solve a problem, He often chooses to leave the situation as it is and instead transform us as human beings.

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