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I enjoyed the teacher's correction last time. However, I prepared the answers on purpose by tying them together because there were so many answers, but I hope you don't change the state in which you tied the questions and made the answers and correct them. If you do it separately, it's hard because there's too much to memorize.

When was the last time you went to a street market?
Do you prefer to go shopping in the shopping mall or on the street market?
à I last went to a street market last weekend to buy fruits and street food. I prefer malls for convenience, but street markets are more fun for unique finds.

How has your mobile phone changed your life?
Do you often use your mobile phone for texting or calls?
à My mobile phone has made my life more convenient by helping me stay connected and manage tasks easily. I mostly use it for texting, but I also make calls when necessary.

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Hi, Young In. Thanks for letting me know about this. We'll do that if it helps you better. Please check the improvements made below. ^^
~T. Jenna

When was the last time you went to a street market?
Do you prefer to go shopping in the shopping mall or on the street market?
I last went to a street market last weekend to buy fruits and street food. I prefer malls for convenience, but street markets are more fun for unique finds.
>>The last time I went to a street market was last weekend, where I bought some fresh fruits and enjoyed street food. While I generally prefer malls for their convenience, I find street markets more exciting. They provide a chance to discover one-of-a-kind items that aren't available in typical shopping centers.

How has your mobile phone changed your life?
Do you often use your mobile phone for texting or calls?
My mobile phone has made my life more convenient by helping me stay connected and manage tasks easily. I mostly use it for texting, but I also make calls when necessary.
>>My mobile phone has significantly enhanced the convenience of my life by helping me stay connected and manage various tasks more efficiently. I primarily use it for texting, but I also make calls when necessary. It has become an essential / indispensable tool for communication and organization in my daily routine.
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