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Every accomplishment starts with the decision to try. — Gail Devers.

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One of the most well-known Korean proverbs is 'Start is a half of completion.' It has more closer insight than any other sayings if it compares with Gail Devers' one. If a person does not take any action to be greater, it will lead that person to be lazy or meaningless on the life. For instance, after I completed military service in 2022, I was a pointless person who had no achievement after accomplished duty of the country. It was a painful time that I have to reset my accomplishment that can be able to sustain my energy level of life. Although, it has required tremendous amount of effort to be settled, my quality of life began to be improved more than my expectation. Therefore, if those who are reading my short opinion of motivating accomplishment, please start that you are thinking right now.

P.S. Every weekend, I would like to do assignment to lubricate my written English.

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Hi Matthew, thank you for giving your personal insights about this quote. Here are some minor corrections that you have to be careful about; nevertheless, all is good and grammatically fine. Job well done, and I would like to hear more from you. T Linda 

P.S. Sure thing! No worries, expect that homework is present after every class. 

It will lead that person to be lazy or meaningless on the life.
>>> It will lead that person to be lazy or meaningless in life.

 I was a pointless person who had no achievement after accomplished duty of the country.
>>>  I was a pointless person who had no achievement after accomplishing the duty for the country.

It was a painful time that I have to reset my accomplishment that can be able to sustain my energy level of life.
>>> I had to reset my accomplishments so I could sustain my energy level of life.

Although, it has required tremendous amount of effort to be settled
>>> Although it has required a tremendous amount of effort to be settled


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