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What is your main New Year\'s resolusion this year?

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What is your main New Year's resolusion this year?

I'd like to effectively spend time and also make a plan of spending money.
Because I should save them for my family's far into the future.
Fisrt, I think that spending time effectively is very important for our life.
As you know about the accident Jeju-air,
when I watch the new, I thought that our life has limited.
So, we have to thank for living together with significant others, and spend time effectively with our family.
To do this,I have to check my health.
Second, I need some planned consumption.
Because my son is very young and has at least 10 years in order to become independent of me.
However, I don't make any plan of far future, yet. So I'm gonna make a strategical plan in New Year.
But, Above all, Health and happiness are the most important things.

Happy new year. Have a nice weekends.

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Hello, Stella! You've surely thought of your New Year's resolution. ^^ I hope you're able to make all of it possible. Thank you for sharing your ideas. Have a great day!
~T. Jewel
I'd like to effectively spend time and also make a plan of spending money.
>>I'd like to spend my time effectively and also create a plan for managing my money.
Because I should save them for my family's far into the future.
>>Because I should save them for my family's future.
Fisrt, I think that spending time effectively is very important for our life.
>>First, I think that spending time effectively is very important for our lives.
As you know about the accident Jeju-air,
>>As you know, there was an accident involving Jeju Air.
when I watch the new, I thought that our life has limited.
>>When I watched the news, I thought that our lives are limited.
So, we have to thank for living together with significant others, and spend time effectively with our family.
>>So, we should be thankful for living together with our loved ones and spend time effectively with our family.
To do this,I have to check my health.
>>To do this, I need to check my health
Second, I need some planned consumption.
>>Second, I need to plan my spending.
Because my son is very young and has at least 10 years in order to become independent of me.
>>Because my son is very young, it will be at least 10 years before he becomes independent.
However, I don't make any plan of far future, yet.
>However, I haven't made any plans for the distant future yet.
So I'm gonna make a strategical plan in New Year.
>>So, I¡¯m going to create a strategic plan in the New Year.
But, Above all, Health and happiness are the most important things.
>>But above all, health and happiness are the most important things.
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