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Why did the plane crash in Jeju?

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First of all, it's not Jeju but Muan airport many expert say landing gear is broke down but some people think it's because of bird strike.
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First of all, it's not Jeju but Muan airport many expert say landing gear is broke down but some people think it's because of bird strike.
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