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How do you plan to stay motivated in continuing or doing your new year¡¯s resolution?

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The first thing we need to do to continue my New Year's resolutions is to make a achievable plan.
Too much greed makes it easy for us to give up.
It is most important to choose what is achievable and needs me the most.
And I think two things are needed to continue the plan.
First, once my New Year's resolution is decided,I should double-check it in the middle to see if it's going well.
Second, it is good to share my resolutions with my family or close friends for motivation.
The hardest promise to keep is a promise with myself.
There is no one to blame for not keeping this promise because no one knows it.
But when I think that someone knows the promise to me, I will continue to work harder to keep it.

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Hi David, I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed reading your essay! Your insights about New Year's resolutions and the steps needed to achieve them were truly inspiring. The way you emphasized making an achievable plan and avoiding excessive greed was very relatable. It's such a practical approach to staying committed. Keep up the amazing work, and I¡¯m looking forward to reading more of your essays in the future!


~ T. Lia


The first thing we need to do to continue my New Year's resolutions is to make a achievable plan.  

>> The first thing we need to do to continue with my New Year's resolutions is to make an achievable plan.  


Too much greed makes it easy for us to give up.  

>> CORRECT 


It is most important to choose what is achievable and needs me the most.  

>>  It is most important to choose what is achievable and what needs me the most.  


And I think two things are needed to continue the plan.  

>> I think two things are needed to continue the plan.  


First, once my New Year's resolution is decided,I should double-check it in the middle to see if it's going well.  

>> First, once my New Year's resolution is decided, I should double-check it midway to see if it's going well.  


Second, it is good to share my resolutions with my family or close friends for motivation.  

>> CORRECT


The hardest promise to keep is a promise with myself.  

>> The hardest promise to keep is the one I make with myself.  


There is no one to blame for not keeping this promise because no one knows it.  

>> CORRECT 


But when I think that someone knows the promise to me, I will continue to work harder to keep it.  

>> But when I think that someone knows about my promise, I will work harder to keep it.

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