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Which is a better choice, travelling alone or travelling with friends?

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2024-12-24 175

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I think traveling with friends is a better choice than travelling alone.
First, traveling with friends allows for a more enjoyable experience. Travel is an opportunity to explore new places and experience different cultures. When with friends, these experiences can be shared, allowing everyone to enjoy each other's reactions. For instance, when witnessing a beautiful landscape, sharing the awe with friends, or discussing tastes while enjoying delicious food creates a special joy that cannot be felt when traveling alone. These shared experiences deepen friendships.

Second, traveling with friends increases safety. When traveling alone, one may be more exposed to various risks. Especially in unfamiliar places, the likelihood of encountering crime or accidents can increase. However, when traveling with friends, they can look out for each other and handle dangerous situations together.

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Hi, Hana! I appreciate your response tonight. Traveling is one of the best ways to learn through experiences. It broadens your horizon. Let us discuss further in the class. See you!
--Teacher Anji

I think traveling with friends is a better choice than travelling alone.
>> CORRECT
First, traveling with friends allows for a more enjoyable experience.
>> CORRECT
 Travel is an opportunity to explore new places and experience different cultures.
>> CORRECT
 When with friends, these experiences can be shared, allowing everyone to enjoy each other's reactions.
>> CORRECT
 For instance, when witnessing a beautiful landscape, sharing the awe with friends, or discussing tastes while enjoying delicious food creates a special joy that cannot be felt when traveling alone. 
>> CORRECT
These shared experiences deepen friendships.
>> CORRECT
Second, traveling with friends increases safety. 
>> CORRECT
When traveling alone, one may be more exposed to various risks. 
>> CORRECT
Especially in unfamiliar places, the likelihood of encountering crime or accidents can increase. 
>> CORRECT
However, when traveling with friends, they can look out for each other and handle dangerous situations together.
>> CORRECT
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