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Why do you think having routines can make life more organized and less stressful?

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It was when I entered university that I thought I should make a life routine.
I didn't need a routine until high school.
Korean high school students study hard every day to enter better universities and to choose better majors.
Of course I worked really hard, too.
My routine at that time was to study hard.
In university, I could have a lot of freedom of choice.
I plan my life every 10 years and make it.
My routine now is also the process of making me in 10 years.
What really matters in a day's life is not busy.
Nothing much changes just although I don't do it right now, and nothing seems to change much just although I do it right now too.
Only time will tell the result of keeping my routine.
I make myself by dividing my routine into one-day routine, one-month routine, and one-year routine.
And I don't get stress because I know how much my appearance has changed after that time.
And because I know it's all the way for me.

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Hi David! I wanted to let you know that I thoroughly enjoyed reading your responses to the topic. Your insights were thoughtful and inspiring, and they gave me a lot to think about. Keep up the amazing work!

- T. Lia

It was when I entered university that I thought I should make a life routine.
>> CORRECT

I didn't need a routine until high school.
>> CORRECT

Korean high school students study hard every day to enter better universities and to choose better majors.
>> Korean high school students study hard every day to enter better universities and choose better majors.

Of course I worked really hard, too.
>> CORRECT

My routine at that time was to study hard.
>> CORRECT

In university, I could have a lot of freedom of choice.
>> In university, I gained a lot of freedom of choice.

I plan my life every 10 years and make it.
>> I plan my life every 10 years and work to achieve it.

My routine now is also the process of making me in 10 years.
>> My routine now is also part of the process of building the future me in 10 years.

What really matters in a day's life is not busy.
>> What really matters in a day's life is not being busy.

Nothing much changes just although I don't do it right now, and nothing seems to change much just although I do it right now too.
>> Nothing much changes even if I don't do it right now, and nothing seems to change much even if I do it right now.

Only time will tell the result of keeping my routine.
>> Only time will reveal the result of keeping my routine.

I make myself by dividing my routine into one-day routine, one-month routine, and one-year routine.
>> I shape myself by dividing my routine into daily, monthly, and yearly plans.

And I don't get stress because I know how much my appearance has changed after that time.
>> I don't feel stressed because I can see how much my appearance has changed over time.

And because I know it's all the way for me.
>> And because I know it's all part of the journey to becoming my best self.


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