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In the past, there are many traditional and complicated practices in wedding. But nowadays some of the practices is removed and the wedding ceremony is becoming simpler. For example, in the past wedding ceremony, \'peybaek\' was an essential procedure, where are bride made a deep bow to her parents in law and relatives. In the ceremony, her family or friends couldn\'t attend. Now most new couples omit this procedure. My daughter and I wanted small and simple wedding.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
Like what you've mentioned in class, maybe omitting this procedure is necessary to maintain equality and fairness for both families. Also, I think nowadays, the younger generation wants to make their own choices for their weddings, so most traditions are omitted as well.
- T. Caitlyn 
In the past, there are many traditional and complicated practices in wedding. 
>> In the past, there were many traditional and complicated practices in weddings.
But nowadays some of the practices is removed and the wedding ceremony is becoming simpler. 
>> But nowadays, some of the practices are removed and the wedding ceremony is becoming simpler.
For example, in the past wedding ceremony, \'peybaek\' was an essential procedure, where are bride made a deep bow to her parents in law and relatives. 
>> For example, in past wedding ceremonies, 'peybaek' was an essential procedure, where the bride made a deep bow to her parents-in-law and relatives.
In the ceremony, her family or friends couldn't attend. 
>> CORRECT
Now most new couples omit this procedure. 
>> CORRECT
My daughter and I wanted small and simple wedding.
>> My daughter and I wanted a small and simple wedding.
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