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What's the difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea?
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What kind of advertising do you like?
Do you like advertisements?
Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?
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Do you like swimming?
Is it difficult to learn how to swim?

Yes, I enjoy swimming because it¡¯s a great wat to stay healthy and relax. Learning to swim can be challenging at first, but with pratice and good guidance, it comes easier.
>>> 
Yes, I enjoy swimming because it¡¯s a great wat to stay healthy and to relax. Learning to swim can be tough at first, but with practice and good guidance, it gets easier.
Where do people in your country like to go swimming?
What's the difference between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea?

In my opinion, people often go to public pools or beaches for swimming. pools are safer and more controlled, while swimming in the sea offers a more adventurous and natural experience, but it can be riskly due to waves.
>>> In my opinion, people usually swim in public pools or beaches. Pools are safer and more controlled, while the sea offers a more adventurous and natural experience, though it can be risky due to the waves.

What kind of advertising do you like?
Do you like advertisements?
Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?

 I like creative and entertaining advertisements, especially those with a good story. Although I enjoy some ads, seeing too many on public transport can feel overwhelming. Memorable ads often use humor or emotions or grab attention.
>>>I enjoy creative and entertaining ads, especially with a good story. While I like some, too many on public transport can be overwhelming. Memorable ads stand out with humor, emotion, or something that grabs attention.
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